It's rather interesting indeed. I agree with everything Echo said, I'll just add some stuff that bothered me a little.
I personnaly think you should have found a better typo than the one you used for all those "I am" in the beginning and that this transition at 00:25 isn't really good, you use it a lot in your first part and I don't know it feels like a preset transition so it's not really interesting to put it in any random time.
Your lip synchs like at 1:10, it's not a question of well executed or not, it's just that it's a bit too long, you should have put other scenes while she was talking or something.
The sounds like those at 1:24, I think you could have marked them more, they're quite loud but your editing don't really change, you might use some distortion effect or whatever to add more pressure during these moments.
Around 1:44, your zoomes aren't well done and you should avoid using a zoom then a dezoom, then a zoom, well try to keep one direction, otherwise it breaks the movement and it's not something advised in general.
So yeah, it's far from being perfect but the basis seems to be there so you just need to improve on the technical side and be cleaner in your effects in general. Good luck for the next!