I didn't really like it, the pace was way too slow in the first chorus and overall, all the scenes were static and you didn't make enough effort to remove this feel. The transitions were mostly cuts and I think the black glow you put on some scenes was useless and was just hiding the scenes (so it slowed the editing even more). So yeah, I think it could have been much better, and not especially with impressive stuff but just little things. It's not because an anime is not awesome in its animation that you should just use it as an excuse imo.
Good luck for the next one