About the editing I think there were too many zooms/dezooms. Moreover some of them were not very logical (for example at 1:17 you have a zoom immediately followed by a dezoom, or at 1:20 you zoom in the ground but the next scene is a landscape).
And also you had some lip flaps (especially at the beginning)
Well apart from that overall I enjoyed it : the pace wasn't bad and I liked your choice of anime and music; but as you said, it is a little like every other 5cm/s clips ^^.
Anyway, good luck for the contest